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IELTS Writing Task 2 (1)

2019-06-15

Recently, there has been growing interest in the relationship between inequality and personal achievement. Some people believe that high levels of personal achievement are possible only if individuals are free to succeed or fail according to their individual merits. Others say that individuals can achieve more in more harmonious societies.
 
Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Write at least 250 words.

 

* Introduce the issue using relevant key words.
 
 
 
 
****Make your stance known.

For long, people have been occupied with the issue of equality and achievement in most societies.* There are those contending that because people are different with respect to their talents and skills, inequality is unavoidable; thus, the job of the government is to guarantee freedom for every individual so that they reach their potential.** Others, however, hold that since wealth and as a result opportunity mostly concentrate in the hands of a privileged few, the governments have to redistribute the existing resources.*** While both views are legitimate, I am convinced that an equal distribution of wealth is more likely to provide contentment for all.****

 
** Restate the first group’s view.
 
 
***Restate the second group’s view.
 
 

* Elaborate on the first view. 

Societies that are considerably unequal in terms of income and access to resources are the ones that germinate the most genuine ideas that result in stunning achievements.*Case in point is the US which has the largest community of entrepreneurs and renowned scientists. American universities top the list of the most expensive universities employ a disproportionately large population of international scholars to explore new realms of science and technology.** Ironically, such countries have large numbers of people who possess no outstanding qualifications and have poor prospects.***

 
 
 
**Use examples to make this argument more comprehensible.
 
*** Use a concession point to present a more mature view .

Use transition words, like nevertheless, to signpost the shift from the first argument to the second. 

Nevertheless, countries that are more egalitarian tend to be of notably higher mean rates of success.* Korea and Finland- for instance- invest greater amounts of money in free education and happen to have higher international levels of literacy.** Despite not producing large numbers of hugely successful people, they enjoy the highest proportions of moderately successful individuals based on their level of income, employment status and satisfaction. What is more, such countries are of the lowest levels of discrimination, deprivation and underachievement.***

*Elaborate on the second view. 
**Use examples to make this argument more comprehensible.
 
***Provide more reasons to substantiate this argument. 

Use phrases, such as in sum, in short etc., to signpost the conclusion.

In sum, although unlimited freedom to tap into resources brings about tremendous success on various levels, wealth and opportunity associated with it can be passed from one generation to the next which will eventually lead to inequality.* Thus, it makes sense for governments to create a more level playing field for all.**

*Acknowledge the first view and its merits.
 
**Conclude with the view you favour.


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